not an animal running,
treated with no respect
what did I really suspect,
This world we call ours
just changes by the hours,
changes its mood by night
can't always win that fight,
we aim for more than we can
why am I not seen as a man,
a figure or just a shadow
not noticed once as a fellow,
I live on the same land as all
but why am i destined to fall,
this won't pull me away from here
I'll stand tall, holding my tear,
a drip might slip,
or my life might skip,
though i shall be invincible
but ill always remain invisible
-Danny D.
Veryyy good! I really like how you structured the poem, it really emphasizes how the narrator feels throughout the entire novel.
ReplyDelete-Melissa Mejico
really good poem Dan. the rhyme scheme and the flow of the poem is perfect and i feel like it could acually be a song. plus you kept the meaning of invisible man in the poem so good job.
ReplyDelete~Jessica D.
Great poem, it was really creative and summed up part of the meaning of the novel.
ReplyDeleteRoberto L.
WOW! This poem was really really good! I actually enjoyed reading it a lot becuase of the fact that it relates to the novel so much. I also like how you rhymed the words, but what made it better was that you used the right words to rhyme with it.
ReplyDeleteVery nice poem!!! I liked how the white space is about even for each line and how the poem flows. I just have one question if you made this poem to be read or spoken because it seems when you say it out loud it come out more?
ReplyDelete-Brent S.
I enjoyed reading this particular poem mostly because of the passion you had was revealed through it; it wasn't just words that were slopped together to "create" a poem. There is great structure, detail (sensory and visual) that appealed to me. By reading this poem, you actually aided me in how to improve some poems of my own. So I thank you for that.
ReplyDelete--Shanyce R.
Sorry for taking so long to write back, but thank you all for your great comments, i appreciate it
ReplyDeleteand Brent yea its better when its spoken
and Shanyce your welcome and good luck with your own poems!